Her Pain…

Happy Good Friday!!!!!!

It’s really nice to have a long weekend, I hope you all have fantastic things planned for this holiday.

I’d like to say thank you to those of you who shared, liked, commented and/or retweeted the link to my last post… it feels good to know you enjoy reading my work.

I’ve spent so much time in the past couple of weeks composing Tanka’s and Haiku’s, I almost forgot I had other forms of poetry to delve into.

Today, I’ve tried to write a tyburn poem, which I found challenging. I feel it’s quite imperfect, but I promised to always share regardless of what I think…


Voiceless

Joyless

Pointless

Weightless

The pain made her voiceless, heart joyless

Life, now pointless amidst weightless words

———-

** Photo credit – Send Your Flower.

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20 Comments Add yours

  1. Xia says:

    You seem to be getting better with your writing..keep it up

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    1. Amina says:

      thank you Xia, that means a lot to me 🙂

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  2. Sumyanna Writes says:

    Nice poem! I’ve never heard of that style before.

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    1. Amina says:

      Thanks Sumyanna…

      if you google ‘tyburn poem’, you’ll get more info on that poetry type 🙂

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      1. Sumyanna Writes says:

        Oh thank you so much! I’m always on the lookout for learning something new. Beautiful!

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      2. Amina says:

        You’re welcome 🙂

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    2. amosgirl says:

      I had never heard of it before either; but I really like it. My poetry is not a very developed talent so I am hoping to get some inspiration from Amina’s work. Here words are beautiful and heartfelt!

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      1. Amina says:

        I hope I’ll be able to inspire you…thank you for your kind words….I really appreciate it 🙂

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      2. amosgirl says:

        I like the freedom I find in the rules of certain forms of poetry . Kind of strange, freedom and rules being together like that; but it’s what I feel when I read your haiku or tanka.

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  3. Suze says:

    I, too, had never heard of a Tyburn poem before. The only poetry that I really enjoy are limericks though. I have a really difficult time understanding just what the heck a person is really saying in poetry. I keep trying though and yours are more easily understood than some I have seen lately.

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    1. Amina says:

      Ah oddly enough I’ve never tried writing a limerick (yet)…

      The thing with poetry is you sometimes have to read it from the perspective of the writer (which is why you might sometimes not understand the message the writer is trying to pass)… I’m glad you’ve been able to understand mine though 🙂

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  4. Suze says:

    I never thought of it that way…”reading from the perspective of the writer”. It almost makes me feel like I might actually understand what a few people have to say through their poetry if I just had a clue who they are. thanks for that thought.

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    1. Amina says:

      You’re very welcome 🙂

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  5. Nice to be here. I am not into Hiaku and Tanka. How do I get into it?

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    1. Amina says:

      A haiku is a three line poem… The first line has 5 syllables, second line has 7 syllables and the third line has 5 syllables.

      A tanka on the other hand is a five line poem… First three lines have the same syllables as a haiku (5-7-5) and the last two lines have 7 syllables each.

      You can check out my haiku and tanka series

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      1. Thanks for the explanation Amina!

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  6. nvsubbaraman says:

    Voice-full
    Joy-full
    Point-full
    Weight-full
    The gain made me voice-full, heartful
    Life ever point-full midst weight full words!

    How is this Amina?

    N V Subbaraman

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    1. Amina says:

      This is a good first attempt but you’re supposed to use the first four words in the last two lines… You need to swop ‘heart full’ in your fifth line with ‘joyful’

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      1. nvsubbaraman says:

        Sorry it is joy-full in the fifth line- keying in mistake. Thanks.

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      2. Amina says:

        You’re welcome 🙂

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